Chad
Sooooo, here's the thing Bros, I'm Thor. And I was thinking that because I'm Thor and I have no classes on Thorsday anyway that maybe I should try to post like once a week. Any thoughts?
Now, moving on to the post that I promised you before I posted the last one, maiming Hiroshi. I've posted like 7 or 8 different times about maiming my Father, you know. And why so many posts, you may ask? Becaus no one will give me feedback on anything -unamused face- and I keep changing my mind! -skitzophrenia face.... whatever that would look like- Hahaha. Anyway! The point is, I cannot finish the war scenes for good until I determine how exactly to maim my Father properly!
Now remember, in reference to FMA and the fabulous Edward Elric, I am going to maim Hiroshi's right arm and left leg. Okay? Right arm, left leg. That's not in question and I'm not changing my mind about that bit. What is in question is how and to what extent do I maim the right arm and left leg?
Originally I was thinking, broken arm, stabbed in the thigh. However, if you recall, I stabbed Kazuo in the thigh with a broken arrow and he rips it out and stabs me with it. Do I really want to do essentially the exact same thing with Kerian and Hiroshi? I tend to think no. But at the same time, I kind of feel that that's the perfect feel for both scenes, but I don't want it to read as repetitive. Soooo, I don't know about that. I was toying with the idea of breaking his leg. Weeeeeell, that's all well and good in theory, but it sort of messes up his mobility in the aftermath of the battle scenes. Which is important. Cause he needs to put everyone in their place. So, I'm kind of like meeeeeeh. What now?
I suppose that I could dislocate his shoulder on the right side or something. Cause that would essentially render his right arm totally useless. Or I suppose that I could have Aiden shoot his Husband instead of his Brother by accident. But that doesn't speak very highly of their teamwork skills which I boast about at some point before the maiming. It also doesn't help my leg conundrum either now does it? Nope. Not at all. I mean, I suppose that I could just do something simple and slash his leg open, that would cause a limp anyway. But it doesn't feel like enough of an injury. Like it doesn't feel like it's enough to make Hiroshi stop fighting. Especially since at this point his Husband can be assumed dead and he's basically the kingdom's last great hope. Hahahha.
Though I suppose that if I threw Daddy across the field that would add something to the deterrent factor. Cause I remember in one of my previous drafts of this scene I had Kerian kick Hiroshi in the chest and send him flying, right after he maimed him. That might work out if I give him a more minor injury to the leg. I don't know...
Input?
And I guess that's it for today then. Happy Thorsday everyone!
Oh yeah. And I'd also like to thank all my friends at school for doing a great job ignoring me. I do so love feeling like I'm talking to the walls. Really I do. -passive aggressive- Whatever.
I don't care anymore.
I'm just gonna keep on dancing,
.....
with my beloved Hammer in hand.
Of course.
Dancing Thor actually makes me so so happy though and dancing Loki is just cute as a zombie button munching on a brain taco. He does look a bit less happy then Thor does when he's dancing though. But then again, I suppose that that is to be expected. Hahaha
5 comments:
Well repetition is valuable in literature if used correctly. If both are stabbed in the leg it sets a theme. And if done right it could come across as poetic even.
If you're still turned off from the dual stabbing, the slash could work if you maybe you added a cracked femur to it. Not exactly a minor injury, but leg wouldn't be completely compromised.
If I wasn't either sick or busy I'd be all over you like druggies in a 7-11 parking lot. If that makes any sense. I'm not entirely sure it does, but it seems almost clever...
And I'd give you feedback more often, but I'm absolute crap at it. Although, personally, I'd go with the most violence without it being too unrealistic. The arrow thing sounds good, but if you think it's repetitive, it might be, but who knows? You're always going to be your own worst critic. I could see slashing the leg open being effective depending on how deep the wound is and if it went through anything vital. Or he could somehow end up with an open compound fracture in his leg. The bone would be sticking out and that would definitely make someone stop fighting, I would think.
Thank you very much Tony Stark. I appreciate the feedback. And you're adorable. <3 But just so that you know, that comment was not so much aimed at you as other people in our group... You're usually always considerate and sweet and I know that you're sick and stuff. Hahaha
Violence is absolutely a consideration here because of the people involved in this scene and their relation to each other. Compound fracture is an interesting idea.
I am curious as to how someone can get poetically stabbed in the leg. Hahaha.
And of course, the other option which I forgot to mention in the post would be to change what Emma stabs/gets stabbed with. I mean, I suppose that it doesn't have to be an arrow. It could be a spear tip maybe.
have the guys foot get cut in half, if the shoe/boot is well enough he could still walk but just be in pain. like a sword falls down landing up (like a sword in a pedestal) so it cuts down the foot a few inches between the 2nd and 3rd toes on either side but not damaging the boot so its still intact, just having a hole in it.
if you do go with the boot thing, your could have him pinned to the ground because of it, and while he is pinned you could do what ever you wanted to do to his arm then. though the pinning thing is kind of like the gladiator, but still kinda cool
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